My English composition

I promised to help one of my foreign student to do an English composition. It had been ages since I've done any composition and thought that it might be fun to try it out :) He wanted to see how I would tackle this sort of question, so as to learn from it.

Here's the title of the essay:

Describe a typical scenario during lunch break in your school and elaborate on how you and your school mates feel about this part of the school day. (350-500 words)

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The teacher’s voice started to get softer and softer, as my stomach’s growling gets progressively louder. I struggled to keep my eyes off the clock, waiting impatiently for that final moment of release that will set me free from this starving prison. It was the final one minute of the last lesson before lunch time in school.

“Riiiiinggg!” went the bell. After a mandatory goodbye to the teacher, I ran out to the canteen together with my friends. The bell signaled the release of a massive horde of hungry souls towards the school canteen. As always, all of us jostled towards the stall selling the famous chicken wings of our school. And as always, there will be a long queue of worshippers waiting to pay their tributes to the temple. In the short 30 minutes of our lunch time, only the quick and the devoted will get to taste the divine manna. I had to taste it today, after suffering from withdrawal syndrome during the weekend.

After an insufferable wait at the queue, I finally managed to get 3 chicken wings from the stall. As I’m one of the first to reach the canteen, there were plenty of seats left empty. I peered around for my classmates and sat down besides them, at a table overlooking the basketball court. Despite this early into our lunch hour, I already saw a few schoolmates playing soccer on the makeshift field, with the goal posts hastily set up between two big rocks. I wondered where these energizer bunnies get their energy from, skipping lunch and even playing under the smothering heat of the noon sun.



As I sank my fangs into the juicy wings, I listened to the gossip of the day. Peter had a crush on this girl in the class; John was ranked first in class in the recent mid-year examinations; Liz saw another classmate smoking in the toilet, and the list goes on. Never much of a gossiper, I turned my attention to another group of friends who are busily doing their homework and reading at the corner of the canteen. They are the untouchables; nobody sat with them because they are just too smart. Their aura of good grades mixed with social awkwardness makes them the class nerds. It is heresy to be found mixing with them. Sinners will be sentenced to a lifetime of being labeled as one of them, a fate worse than death for impressionable youths like me.

Lunch time is the only time where a little sanity is restored to the otherwise mundane and structured school life. It is the only time where we are allowed to socialize with our peers without repercussions. No matter how we chose to spend this precious 30 minutes of freedom, everyone thought it was not long enough.

“Riiiiinggg!”

(469 words)

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What do you think? Give me a grade yah? haha!